Ooc: Ok, This story I posted on Neo, but not alot notice was taken to it. Mainly I need Critique for it and it would be much appreciative.]
~/♥/~The Heart of Mieraz~/♥/~
-Prologue-
"Only five kids, whose special talents only I can see, will come to my home in Verona, Italy"
announced Sueang Miina de Coreeze, "They will be staying with me, so I might choose my heir".
When she finished, The crowd stood and applauded her. *wild clapping*
"Wait, Mrs. Coreeze, one more question.
What talents are you looking for?" a young reporter asked.
"Only those who know about Mieraz,
would understand what I'm talking about" The elderly woman replied.
And with that, she left..........
-Prologue-
"Only five kids, whose special talents only I can see, will come to my home in Verona, Italy"
announced Sueang Miina de Coreeze, "They will be staying with me, so I might choose my heir".
When she finished, The crowd stood and applauded her. *wild clapping*
"Wait, Mrs. Coreeze, one more question.
What talents are you looking for?" a young reporter asked.
"Only those who know about Mieraz,
would understand what I'm talking about" The elderly woman replied.
And with that, she left..........
~//~Chapter 1~//~
~"A singer's sorrows"~
"Alex, wait up!" Dill called.
"What can I do for you, Dill?" Alex replied, clearly annoyed.
"You did we singing today" He commented, "well, for your first time"
"So, I did well because of beginners luck?" I snapped.
"No, no, That's not what I mean-" He started. But I cut him off.
"Don't worry, in a little over a week, you'll be in Iowa, and away from me" I replied tightly.
"What's up with you? Ever since you heard we were moving, you've acted like we're worst enemies" he asked.
"Apparently, you are out of the loop" I laughed, "If you have to ask, you are an idiot".
"Excuse me?" a man in a blue suit interrupted us, "Are you Dillan Riohclem?"
"Yea, that's me" Dill, answered.
"I have a letter for you, here" the man replied, as he handed the letter to Dill. After that, he walked away quickly.
"What's it say" I asked impatiently.
"Here, you read it" He said, handing me the letter.
"Dear Mr. Riohclem,
I am pleased to say you have the 'special' talents I'm looking for. Enclosed is a form that you and your parents are to sign. When the signing is complete, please send to 865 Lord's Lady avenue, Verona, Italy, 05753. I will send you a list of items you will need here at my estate. But if you choose not to come, you will miss out on a great adventure and treasure. So I hope to hear from you soon. Yours truly,
Sueang Miina De Coreeze".
"Ive heard of her, from the news. If you've been chosen, you're probably going to get rich!" I exclaimed.
"What do you mean?" he asked.
"About a month ago, it was all over the T.v., Internet, Radio broadcasts, everywhere" I started.
"Just get on with it" He said exasperated.
"So much for dramatic build-up" I giggled, "Mrs. Coreeze is one of the richest people in the world. But, she has no heir. Well, about a month ago, she decided to look for a heir".
"She's having some sort of....Competition, you could call it" I continued, "No one knows what it entails, but at the end, last person standing, becomes her heir".
Dill just looked at me blankly. "What do you think I should do?" He asked me.
"How am I supposed to know?" I replied sharply, "I mean, if you want to go, no Iowa, right?". I laughed uneasily.
"I shouldn't care what you do. I've got to go now, bye" I said as I ran toward my awaiting family.
As I started to my family, Dill said something, he assuming I couldn't hear.
"You shouldn't care, but I hope you do".............
~//~Chapter 2~//~
~"Farewell"~
"Totally bored......So, so, totally bored" I complained to my mother.
"I don't care! Go join one of the games or something" She snapped at me, " Think they're starting a game of Hide-n-go-Seek".
I guess she was tired of my complaining.
"*sigh* But mom, I'm sixteen. Do you really think that I'm going to play with the little kids?" I replied.
She glared at me.
" Fine, I'll go find something to do" I quickly said before she could yell at me again.
I walked around to the other side of the house and sat on the front porch. I was relieved to be away from the screaming kids and the gossiping adults, in the back yard.
As I was sitting there, I began to contemplate on the current events.
My family and I were at a going away party for the Riohclems. People I had known since as long as I could remember, were moving back to Iowa. I would say from my hometown, but we didn't live in the same town. We went to the same church, but lived in different towns. They lived further from church then we, the Rosens, did.
Everyone seemed to be enjoying themselves, except me.
I was probably the most miserable person at the party, apart from the the members of the Riohclem family.
In the Riohclem family there are 6 members. There's Deacon Dan, He's the Deacon at our church and the head of the family. Aunt Renee, who's Deacon Dan's wife. Meggie, the oldest and only girl. She already went to Iowa with her husband and son. Seth, who's the second oldest. He was away, over seas. There's Dillan, who's my age. He had already left the country for Mrs. Coreeze's competition thing. And then there's Innis, the youngest. Basically only three members of the Riohclem family were there.
I was lonely.
The only person who was my age, was my older brother, and he had volunteered to cook. He just likes to cook(creepy, I know).
My younger siblings, Innis, and the other kids were all playing games that just didn't entertain a sixteen-year-old.
Even if Dill was here, we would just spend our time insulting each other. We seemed to be doing that often. I haven't any idea why though.
As I sat contemplating things, I hadn't realized how hungry I had become. So when my dad called everyone for dinner, I became ravenous.
I headed back for dinner, to stop my brother's complaining.
We didn't notice that a strange man had come to the gathering, till after we said the dinner prayer.
A man in a blue suit.
The same one who delivered Dill's letter........
~"A singer's sorrows"~
"Alex, wait up!" Dill called.
"What can I do for you, Dill?" Alex replied, clearly annoyed.
"You did we singing today" He commented, "well, for your first time"
"So, I did well because of beginners luck?" I snapped.
"No, no, That's not what I mean-" He started. But I cut him off.
"Don't worry, in a little over a week, you'll be in Iowa, and away from me" I replied tightly.
"What's up with you? Ever since you heard we were moving, you've acted like we're worst enemies" he asked.
"Apparently, you are out of the loop" I laughed, "If you have to ask, you are an idiot".
"Excuse me?" a man in a blue suit interrupted us, "Are you Dillan Riohclem?"
"Yea, that's me" Dill, answered.
"I have a letter for you, here" the man replied, as he handed the letter to Dill. After that, he walked away quickly.
"What's it say" I asked impatiently.
"Here, you read it" He said, handing me the letter.
"Dear Mr. Riohclem,
I am pleased to say you have the 'special' talents I'm looking for. Enclosed is a form that you and your parents are to sign. When the signing is complete, please send to 865 Lord's Lady avenue, Verona, Italy, 05753. I will send you a list of items you will need here at my estate. But if you choose not to come, you will miss out on a great adventure and treasure. So I hope to hear from you soon. Yours truly,
Sueang Miina De Coreeze".
"Ive heard of her, from the news. If you've been chosen, you're probably going to get rich!" I exclaimed.
"What do you mean?" he asked.
"About a month ago, it was all over the T.v., Internet, Radio broadcasts, everywhere" I started.
"Just get on with it" He said exasperated.
"So much for dramatic build-up" I giggled, "Mrs. Coreeze is one of the richest people in the world. But, she has no heir. Well, about a month ago, she decided to look for a heir".
"She's having some sort of....Competition, you could call it" I continued, "No one knows what it entails, but at the end, last person standing, becomes her heir".
Dill just looked at me blankly. "What do you think I should do?" He asked me.
"How am I supposed to know?" I replied sharply, "I mean, if you want to go, no Iowa, right?". I laughed uneasily.
"I shouldn't care what you do. I've got to go now, bye" I said as I ran toward my awaiting family.
As I started to my family, Dill said something, he assuming I couldn't hear.
"You shouldn't care, but I hope you do".............
~//~Chapter 2~//~
~"Farewell"~
"Totally bored......So, so, totally bored" I complained to my mother.
"I don't care! Go join one of the games or something" She snapped at me, " Think they're starting a game of Hide-n-go-Seek".
I guess she was tired of my complaining.
"*sigh* But mom, I'm sixteen. Do you really think that I'm going to play with the little kids?" I replied.
She glared at me.
" Fine, I'll go find something to do" I quickly said before she could yell at me again.
I walked around to the other side of the house and sat on the front porch. I was relieved to be away from the screaming kids and the gossiping adults, in the back yard.
As I was sitting there, I began to contemplate on the current events.
My family and I were at a going away party for the Riohclems. People I had known since as long as I could remember, were moving back to Iowa. I would say from my hometown, but we didn't live in the same town. We went to the same church, but lived in different towns. They lived further from church then we, the Rosens, did.
Everyone seemed to be enjoying themselves, except me.
I was probably the most miserable person at the party, apart from the the members of the Riohclem family.
In the Riohclem family there are 6 members. There's Deacon Dan, He's the Deacon at our church and the head of the family. Aunt Renee, who's Deacon Dan's wife. Meggie, the oldest and only girl. She already went to Iowa with her husband and son. Seth, who's the second oldest. He was away, over seas. There's Dillan, who's my age. He had already left the country for Mrs. Coreeze's competition thing. And then there's Innis, the youngest. Basically only three members of the Riohclem family were there.
I was lonely.
The only person who was my age, was my older brother, and he had volunteered to cook. He just likes to cook(creepy, I know).
My younger siblings, Innis, and the other kids were all playing games that just didn't entertain a sixteen-year-old.
Even if Dill was here, we would just spend our time insulting each other. We seemed to be doing that often. I haven't any idea why though.
As I sat contemplating things, I hadn't realized how hungry I had become. So when my dad called everyone for dinner, I became ravenous.
I headed back for dinner, to stop my brother's complaining.
We didn't notice that a strange man had come to the gathering, till after we said the dinner prayer.
A man in a blue suit.
The same one who delivered Dill's letter........